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Writing task


This week’s writing task is based around the image in the attached Powerpoint ‘Waiting' There is a task to complete for each slide of the Powerpoint. I recommend you do a slide each day this week. This week we are focusing on building suspense and using figurative language.


Monday - Task 1: We learnt about building suspense in our stories in Autumn term. I wonder how much you can remember.

Read the story starter and then watch the presentation in the link below. Can you find any of the features mentioned? 

  1. Short sentences
  2. Elipsis
  3. Similes, metaphors or personification

You could print out the story starter and colour code each feature or write your examples out in a table to send to me.


Tuesday - Task 2: Have a go at inserting a relative clause into the last two sentences on the slide. Remember: 

  • relative clauses must start with a relative pronoun (who, which, where, when, whose or that). 
  • You need to use commas to separate your relative clause from the main clause.

If you are feeling a bit unsure about relative clauses, BBC bitesize has a good explanation. The link is below.


Wednesday - Task 3: Think about your answers to the questions on slide 3. Share your thoughts with a family member or write them down.


Thursday - Task 4: Improve the sentences using one or more of the following:

  • Adverb.
  • Adjectives.
  • Prepositions phrases.
  • Extending sentences with conjunctions.

You can add words, but you can also change the words that are already there to make them more powerful or descriptive.


For at least one of these sentences, could you extend it by using a simile or a metaphor? What does it remind you of?

e.g. The hippo glided into the water  like a submarine.


Friday - Task 5: This is your main writing task. You are going to continue the story. I would like you to write a paragraph or more, revealing what the hippo had seen. For the best effect, this should be something that helps change the atmosphere from calm, to exciting. What has the hippo seen? Was it something that could cause it harm? Was it something that it would like to catch and eat? Was it another hippo, who is intruding on his territory? 

Try to use the following in your writing:

  • figurative language (similes, mataphors or personification)
  • powerful verbs
  • a relative clause

There is a link below for Live Science. This takes you to some information about Hippos. You may find this useful in making your story realistic.